The last of me was the first thing you noticed, between smiles that never reached the eyes and laughter that came at all the wrong moments, the end caught your attention before the beginning, and mine was caught on anything but
Where
Focus
Should
Lie
What about a girls downfall is considered so irresistible?
that tears need be wiped dry
and why must rage be quietened
for her to be
fixed
You thought my end was in the promise that next year would be the last
thing
you’d
notice
when you’d offer a kiss goodbye and I’d smile, give in return and then thank you for seeing me as
such a delightful
project
Such a worthy
Fixer up
And if you see me as a home I understand why you took the hammer to my heart
but excuse my confusion as this
Is
Where
I thought laid the hearth one day we would sit our children before
yet you fixed the cracks in the walls
only to leave all the windows open
for rain to fall inside
to stand and watch
as rot wrapped around these arms
where you’d promised to wind daisy chains
the white of their petals stained red
from the thorns of roses that restrained
before
You could step once more over my threshold
where if only you had noticed
that the first time a home is damaged
it may learn to stand again
it’s foundation hardened
however superficially
But the second time
it is left empty
it’s crumbling walls
and creaking floors
no longer irresistible
To an eye that saw what could be
rather than what already was
It will fall
This is fantastic!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Lisa! xx
LikeLike
Oh Arbie, this is so heart-wrenching, a superbly written and constructed piece….
LikeLiked by 1 person
Means so much coming from you, Ivor… thank you! ❤ xxxx
LikeLike
I like it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Awesome, I’m really pleased to hear you do!
LikeLiked by 1 person
You brought a tear to the eye of this old poet. Great writing! ☺
LikeLiked by 1 person
Eeep! *hugs* Thank you, Walt! 😀 xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
Your welcome my friend 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
This is superbly written! Brilliant! I had read a few of your ramblings, but this one is fantastic! The piece gets you hooked from the start, and your words really leave no breathing space for the reader, no space wasted, everything terse and intact, till the reader reads the ending lines – a tumultuous journey trotted in such a small space.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wow, Risshu, what a comment! You definitely need to come back again haha! And not just because your own writing is amazing so I like having you around here. 😛 Thank you for such kind words!
LikeLike
Ah! The pleasure was mine Arbie. The piece deserved all the praise. Glad! 😊😊
LikeLike
Wow! I’m really impressed about how well you expressed a tremendous amount of feelings. Very good work my dear Arbie. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you! I think at the beginning I was a bit confused with where I was going but we got there in the end haha! ❤ xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
Damn fine – when you set your mind to prose you are one of my favorites out there! Yes there, in the cyber ether (see me waving my arms hither and thither!). Lurvve it! ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
*blushes and grins like a mad woman* Thank you! Also, can’t help but imagine you’re doing some Kate Bush (from Heathcliff in particular) dance moves with the hithering and thithering! Haha! xxxx
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes indeed! I am out on the wily, windy moor (of my mind).
In reality I’m at work … such a waste for someone of my literary ilk hehe 🌸😘
LikeLike
Well-penned dear Arbie xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
Soiba! Good to see you! Thank you! 😀 xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
well done Arbie
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Michael! 😀
LikeLiked by 1 person
great post Arbie – very powerful! Keep in mind that we’re open for submissions on our creative space when you’re writing in the future.
Can’t wait to read more!
Fred
Off Your Chest blog
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oooh, exciting! I’ll for sure keep that in mind! Thank you for stopping by! 😀
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wow, Arbie! I have goosebumps!!! This poem is par excellent and it brought so much emotion within me it’s not funny!!! Fantastic utterly fantastic write! 👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼
LikeLiked by 1 person
Eeeee, Amy! Thank you so much! Really pleased that you liked it! ❤ xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are very welcome! 😘
LikeLiked by 1 person
Brilliance makes me smile.
Which is why you and Poe do too.
LikeLiked by 1 person
😮One of the best things ever said to me!! Thank you!! I’m so glad that I do!
LikeLike
So well written, but I am not surprised, all of your material is!
LikeLike
This is such a powerful piece ❤. The words have imprinted easily in my mind and the amount of emotions that were born into my soul are deep! Greetings from a rainbow soul turned monochrome 🌈!
LikeLike